I walked through the door and saw a hat on the the table. I asked why was that hat on the table? It was not there before. When did it get there? Why is it there? I walked up stairs to go take a shower, to clear some thoughts out of my head. I got out of the shower and went to get dressed. I walked back down stairs and the hat disappeared I said “that is so strange”. So I walked to the kitchen to get something to eat. Then I heard a bang up stairs. What was that?
Your use of questioning has a strong impact. It makes the reader think. I like how the narrator used the shower to ‘clear the head’. And, then the piece got ‘curiouser’ and ‘curiouser’. Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA